Tuesday, August 6, 2013

Primevil Vignettes Series, Book 2

Writing Journal: The Adjusters #43 seems to have been well received, which I'm happy about. Next month's #44 is the final setting up of dominos for Book IV, after which I kick them and we see where things land. While the pace of #41–44 was a bit on the slow side, the rest of Book IV should be more snappy. I started on #45 this week, which looks like it will be an easy one to write (as opposed to #43–44, which were painful, with #44 still in pretty rough shape).



Quick question for the folks out there: if you bookmark stories, what do you use for bookmarking? I've been using Delicious because I started with it and inertia is pretty strong with me for stuff like that, but it's not ideal when you've accumulated a lot of bookmarks. Maybe I just haven't found the right way to tag things—I hate tagging—but I'm happy to take recommendations. I would like my bookmarks to live online, though, since I want to access them from different machines. (Although presumably I could store them in a dropbox-synchronized folder.)

The story for today is Book 2 of Velvetglove's Primevil Vignettes series, Rooting for the Underdog: “Multi-part, multi-character, non-consensual saga set in an imaginary country ruled by a dictatorship.” I've talked about Book 1 before, which I enjoyed a lot, and this one is a direct continuation, in exactly the same style—except for the scenes being somewhat shorter. Still a great idea, and I love the cruel little twists here and there. (Note to self: short sex scenes—maybe try that one day. Ah! Who am I kidding?...)

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  1. It's six months or more since Jennifer broke up with Daniel. How does she see her chances of getting her ex back? She going to flash her ink at him?

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    1. If you remember In Aware, she recounts what happens to her and Daniel. How Biff made her seduce Daniel and she wished Daniel would have save her and was devestated afterwords. Then at the Dik Bash when Biff gave her those instructions. Its almost as if she wishes she could be with Daniel but feels so hopeless right now, ut we'll have to wait and see how BT3 decides to write that.

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    2. That chapter says Jennie will avoid Daniel at all costs; that he scares her, and that she'll claw his eyes out if she bumps into him.

      With Cindy the other side of the country at UCLA and Jennie avoiding Dan, I guess it's time for a new girlfriend for Dan soon.

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  2. I guess we are going to have to wait for Bt3 to progress the story to find out. there are a huge amount of options for him to pursue and unfortunately we as his readers are going to have to be patient. Having said that, I'm want my Adjusters now, Please. :)

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  3. “It's six months or more since Jennifer broke up with Daniel. How does she see her chances of getting her ex back? She going to flash her ink at him?”

    That's an excellent question—beside the technical “how will they get back together?” there is the subjective “how does she figure she might get him back?”

    I'll figure out how to convey that soon. Most logical place seems to be in #46, but don't hold me to it.

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  4. As I am impatiently waiting for the next chapters, I would love to see a situation where Jenn is reunited with Daniel. I would guess the scene where she tries to carry out Biffs instructions and then she ends up having to be refocused on Daniel as her "master" as a consequence of whats been done to her. I am also REALLY interested to see how all this integrates in with Adcorp and the Adjusters. I somehow think that Jenn's plight is going to be tied into that is a big big way. As always its the process thats the most interesting to me. Please BT3 write faster, I need input. Jenn and Daniel are the main characters but Adcorp and the Adjusters are the story. At least in my eyes.

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    1. “I need input. Jenn and Daniel are the main characters but Adcorp and the Adjusters are the story.”

      That's pretty close to my own feelings on the matter. And yes, it's all connected.

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    2. I am so looking forward to seeing where Adcorp and the Adjusters go, who they are, what their agenda is and how it affects the current characters and the past ones also. Just impatiently waiting.

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  5. You want to see Jenn and Dan re-united? Here it is:

    The doorbell rings, and it's her. Good lord, it's really her. Jenn. Before Dan can say anything, she throws her arms around his neck, and hugs him tight. He feels her breasts against his chest. She looks at you with sparkling eyes.

    "Earth to Dan. You there?"

    She's wearing a small red dress with white polka dots. It leaves most of her shoulders and neck exposed, being held up by two thin straps, and hugs her body close, drawing attention to breasts, more generous than he remembered them, a small waist and the curve of her hips. Lower, the dress spreads out slightly, and stop mid-thighs, revealing her perfectly formed legs, wrapped in translucent white nylons. Her legs go on forever, and end in a pair of three-inch stiletto white pumps. I can't stop my eyes from traveling up and down her body, practically salivating. She obviously got a boob job. Tastefully done, must have cost some money. Her breasts, which looked great, now are spectacular. And those lumps under her blouse - am I imaging it or are those nipple rings?

    "Jenn?"

    "Of course, silly."

    "Huh... right... I mean... Wow!"

    Jenn laughs. "That's my native English speaker! How about inviting me in?"

    Still dumbstruck, you wave your hand towards the couch.

    "Please. Californian Chardonnay OK?"

    She nods and slowly walks inside, giving you an enticing view of her rear. You pull your eyes away from her, long enough to grab a bottle of wine and some snacks. Two minutes later, you're both sitting in the sofa, glass of wine in hand. She takes a sip, and starts talking. It's as if the floodgates are opened. Words gush out, as you sit back in the sofa, trying to take it all in.

    She talks of Biff forcing her to do things. Of how he made her get a tattoo - the words "Biff's Cunt" just above her slit. That the tattoo's in red ink, and permanent. That Biff's history now. How she'd like to show her commitment to you by getting a tattoo "Dan's Delight" round her sphincter. And could she come back, please?

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    1. Oh, that's sweet! And I really dig the clothing. Very nice touch. (Love the red & white, especially.)

      Thanks for sharing this.

      I may go in a slightly different direction in the actual story, though...

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  6. Well done, I enjoyed it. It will be really interesting to see how BT3 handles the situation. I am so interested in what's coming. Your's however, is good.

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