Happy Easter, if you celebrate it. If not, then Happy Fertility Day.
Slogging through revisions to The Adjusters #16. Both it and #17 are a bit different, as you'll see, and it makes it more difficult to get right. We'll see how it turns out. But let me just say for future reference: no more stories with umpteen thousand characters. Sheesh, what a mess.
Anyways... A few stories caught my attention this week. All of them on Storiesonline, so you'll need an account there if you don't already have one. (You should: it's free, and there are some amazing stories on there.)
First up, Diary of a Wife, by Hawthorne: "It takes years for a married couple to finally figure out that she needs to submit, and he wants to dominate. Once she reveals her past, he makes her is own... in every way." A submission story, very well done. I especially like the first chapter, where the wife reveals herself for what she really is. Some really hot stuff in there. Too bad that the story seems to have been abandoned.
Next up, Tarnished Innocence, by Shani 34: "The new employee seemed to be perfect, but Mike discovered that she wasn't all that she seemed. She had lied to him, and to previous employers, and when he challenges her she admits it. And she accepts punishment, and asks for more. Mike tries to give her the excitement she craves." Another submission story, clearly. Some nice scenes in there, and a good pace.
Last up, the biggie -- Conflicted, by Eldridge: "Damon, an 18 year old high school athlete, learns some startling, yet very interesting things about his cheerleader younger sister, and the things she does with her best friends. As he slowly gets involved with the group of girls, however, he begins to realize that there may be more to his newfound happiness than he first realized." As the author points out, a "slow building story with lots of plot and subplots, as well as lots of sex in the later chapters." No shit. I'm three quarters into it, and it's just phenomenal. Lots of sex, good characters, amazing dialogue, and even the psychology is not that far off. (Warning: some incest.) It reminds me a lot of An Ordinary Teenage Sex Life by Bluedragon -- which I've talked about before -- both in style and in content, and it holds up very well to the comparison. Read it, that's all I'm going to say about it.
so read some of MWTB work/ nicely done esp growing up master and the favor. only problem with those 2 and the selection you suggested on wed, they feel like they need to be continued and he's currently on hiatus....such a shame. either way those were some pretty good stories
ReplyDeleteI'll check out "The Favor" -- haven't read it yet. And yeah, stories that are abandoned (or on indefinite hiatus) do suck. but sometimes they have such great scenes in them that they have to be shared. It's tough though. One of my favorite stories is "Good to the Last Drop" (it's on the EMCSA), and while it's not officially on hiatus, it's updated abysmally slowly...
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