Two Long Stories

Writing Journal: Finished a draft of The Adjusters #27. It's clocking at more than 14000 words. Way too much. But the episode is the episode, and splitting it in two wouldn't work so well. Sigh. So much for trying to stick to the 6000–8000 words range per episode. Now, to finish revising #23, which goes out tomorrow (possibly late in the evening, be warned). Then, I can fight with #28, the DIK-Bash.

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I've got two long stories that I came across and read over the last few weeks and which may be of interest to the lot of you.

The first is a great and still ongoing tale. Started in 2006 by expatdad, it's called An African Seduction: “A modern career minded, churchgoing mother, attracts the interest of a rich African rakehell in Zimbabwe.” Somewhat cuckold-ish, but it's mostly a story about a beautiful woman willing to demean herself to please the man she falls in love with, including giving up her own daughter's virginity. It starts slow—I didn't get into the story into the fourth chapter or so—but there are some amazingly hot scenes in there. At least one character's a minor though, so be warned.

The other long story to which I gave a try is a time-travel story, which I had to look at for completeness since it's more or less along the lines of what I want to do with my next project, Leapers. It's by Phil Brown, and it's called Second Time Through: “‘On top of that, I now find myself tied to a wealthy, hypersexual, 16 year old Empath, with a heretofore, unheard of skill set, and an unknown enemy that could strike at any time.’ Anna exclaimed. ‘Welcome to my new life!’ I thought.” This story starts out like your classic time-travel story—old man dies and gets reincarnated in a younger body several years in the past (not his own body), and wakes up as in many other such stories in a hospital with pretty nurses all around him. But after that, it gets real odd. The guy turns out to be an empath, and there is a bit of sex and lots of characters in the first dozen chapters. I will not finish this story. That's because while I do find some of the underlying plot points intriguing, the story itself hasn't grabbed me, and I stopped reading when everyone absconds to a nudist colony, because if there's something that really does not do it for me, it's nudism. It just ain't sexy to me. (That's one of the many reasons I never got into the Naked In School universe on Storiesonline.). However, since your mileage may vary, and it is actually well written, you should have a look and decide for yourself.