Response to Comments, and a Story by Erotica_Girl_NYC

Several comments came in on the heels of my posting The Adjusters #12 that call for some response on my parts. Very good comments, too. What do I mean by that? Comments that make me think about what it is I'm writing about.

I do read everything people send me, either as comments here or by email -- I may not be the fastest to respond, but I do give everything consideration.

Wow, very, very hot. I'm not waiting to see what happens when Biff calls. Any hints for eager readers? ;)

How about I give you a small preview of something that happens down the line, a few episodes hence, straight off the drafting board, just to wet your appetite? Be warned, this is unedited, and may well change by the time it comes out: Things hardly got better when the couple stopped their embrace. After Biff sat down on a seat, he patted his thigh and Jenn obediently sat down astride his lap, one arm around his shoulders, and nuzzling his neck, her long hair spilling across Biff’s back, the perfect picture of the devoted girlfriend. They were watched carefully by several students around them, many eyeing lustfully Jenn’s lithe form and long legs, undoubtedly dreaming about what she might feel like were she sitting on their laps. Then Biff pulled her head back and kissed her again, and that kiss was just as long and as passionate as their last one. Jenn was wriggling on Biff’s lap, and running her hands through his hair.

What if Biff dies before give another order?
Or Daniel breaks the bracelet?
Will Jenn get free?

I guess if Biff dies before giving another order, then what happens depends on the last order he gave. As of the end of #12, since his standing order is to respond to his call when he calls, if he doesn't call, I'd guess that Jenn just goes on living her life. You're thinking Biff might have an... accident? As far as breaking the bracelet, it's actually not entirely clear what would happen. The programming process that the good doctor uses is not the most stable, and only he really knows what the bracelets do. There was a warning of sorts in #11 that the bracelet should not be removed while a girl is "activated", that's about all we know. And as for Jenn getting free... that'd be telling, wouldn't it?

I find it Infuriating, how clueless this Daniel guy is about ongoing events. Everything is clear as day, yet he allows Biff to finish his binding mantra and refrain from any argumets with his girl. I would at least have snapped pictures or recorded a video of ongoing cheat with my cellphone, almost every cellphone has camera nowdays, right?

Yes, Daniel really was acting like an idiot, wasn't he? Not really what we came to expect from him. He's going to have to face up to his behavior, and figure out why he didn't do any of the things you rightfully suggest. In fact, he could have tried to stop Biff, or at least interrupt them, or take pictures, or confront Jenn more forcefully that evening. He just sat in a daze through it all. Like an idiot. He needs to have some sense slapped back into him. I'm with you on that.

Again, thanks for your comments, everyone. And please feel free to send suggestions my way. Now, I have the main arc for Book II fairly well plotted out (at least up to #23, but I know what happens even beyond that, if not in details), but I've been known to respond and use suggestions that people send my way if they tickle my fancy. So feel free to suggest things. I cannot promise I will use your suggestions, but I promise I will give them due consideration!

Okay, I've already blabbed for too long.

To keep you distracted, let me point you to an interesting story I've ran across on Literotica called Petty Cash, by erotica_girl_nyc. It takes a rather standard plot line (office girl does something illegal and is blackmailed by her boss), but the office girl character is more ambivalent than usual about the developments that occur, and the continuing story is quite promising:

I pushed the window over to the side and clicked back on the one containing my work. Lifting my head, I looked around...no one had seen anything. My desk was situated in a position in a corner of the office, so it made it hard for people to sneak up on me and see what I was working on. Still, I was overly cautious. I didn't want anyone to see that I was actually looking at wedding photos instead of working.

I clicked back on the wedding window. I sighed. The wedding in the pictures was so beautiful. My vision began to blur as my eyes teared up. I quickly dabbed them with a tissue and clicked back to my work.

It wasn't that I was one of those weepy girls who cried anytime she saw a wedding. I looked at the clock. 4:55 p.m. Almost quitting time. I was near tears because I'd been planning my perfect wedding my whole life, and now that I'd met my perfect man, Dean, and we were only 6 weeks away from our wedding, it looked like I wasn't going to be able to have it...

Continue reading...

There are a lot more such blackmail stories around that are must-reads, and many that are just plain fun (read: "twisted and depraved and pretty hot", of course). I'll dig them out and post them next time. Stay tuned.