What I will do, then, is simply to dedicate this post and its associated comment thread as a place where you folks can feel free to speculate on what the heck you think is going on with the story. Or, for that matter, speculate on anything you want. It's your comment thread, do what you want with it.
As far as I am concerned, I will not reply to anything posted in the comments here. That'll avoid the possibility of spoilerage, or me influencing the discussion by being purposely obscure and obfuscating, as I'm wont to do. I will probably read the comments, though, since they'll show up indiscriminatingly in my RSS reader. And that will let me keep an eye on things so that I can step in if the discussion somehow degenerates into a schoolyard brawl. (Not that I expect that to happen, since we're all nice folks here -- well, aside from enjoying reading about twisted perverted people doing nasty things to each others.)
Now back to our scheduled programming. If you need your weekly smut, here's a great way to while away the time at the theater when the movie's a yawner:
(Courtesy of ErosBlog.)
so i'm the loony that suggested, after we found out blogger didn't exist. lets see if it was a good idea or out of left field.
ReplyDeleteClearly we know certain things: Daniel is the main character and should win in the end. Theoretically, he should rescue his g/f and best friend back to normal, but that isn't always the case in these stories. Sometimes, you can't totally fix them(but could save them from a worse fate).
I think more interestingly, is the relationship (if there is one) btwn the brunette (who we don't know), this mysterious organization, and the good doctor. Not sure who they are- gov't, evil organization, or just company that the doctor ran away from.
I think in the end though, the DIK brothers (maybe minus Jackson) might get a wake up call as they are being used. jackson was brought in I think as someone who takes advantage of the girls but was hesitant at first and I'm not sure he totally buys in to that.
Personally, I've been very conflicted the last few chapters. On one hand I knew this would happen, on the other seeing Daniel and Jenn going through this has been painful after seeing them together so long. I want to see him go all Matrix on that Frat house. Take my girl...I'll take your lives... :D
ReplyDeleteOf course that doesn't fit with the story and wouldn't work. So what I think/hope will happen is that Daniel and Radhu will come up with some way to back engineer the mind control process so they can deprogram Jenn and Serena. I'm hoping for a suitably painful ending for Biff too please. Make that slime suffer.
Ok, here are a few things I hope happen:
ReplyDeleteCindy turned double-agent: As of #17, Cindy is on Daniel's side and doing her own thing. Soon, Kevin finds out through the grapevine that she's not wearing her bracelet anymore and decides to bring her in to talk to her about it. Without her bracelet on she doesn't respond to the trigger and starts lecturing Kevin on how he just doesn't get it. This is where we find out that the "Dick Brother" programming is really only a response trigger and that the girls are really programmed with the "Dick Master" trigger. Kevin puts a new bracelet on her and puts her in a programming trance with the "Dick Master" trigger and programs her. When he is done, she returns to Daniel with no memory of being programmed by Kevin, without a bracelet on, and is still helping him, but several nights a week she returns to Kevin where he puts her back under and fucks her while she tells him everything Daniel is doing.
Random run-in with Sonya: One of the dick brothers gets busted by Sonya and he gets her alone, then triggers her to be his plaything.
Radhu learns about the programming & has a conflict: Radhu learns about the programming by seeing someone use it on Serena. Then he steals a ring and the next time he is alone with her he tries it out. Sure enough, she is his plaything and he has to decide if he does the right thing or indulges himself a bit first. He yields to temptation and takes her. Afterward, he lays there feeling guilty and wondering what the hell he is going to do now while she quietly sleeps next to him. Later, we see him "testing" Kyra too. A nice twist might be for him to get pulled over by Sonya, recognize her charm bracelet, and whip out his ring to trigger her...
I am pondering how that lucky bastard Farid got to train, use and abuse the lucious Cindy. Hoping that he appears again before Cindy and Daniel hook-up and eventually overthrow the Dr. and Frat boys. Speculating that this novella ends much sooner than I would like but I"ll enjoy it while I can.
ReplyDeleteI suspect Farid has some "adjustment" technology of his own. Might explain why Cindy was somewhat immune when the DIK training was applied to her...
ReplyDeleteIf so, we definitely need to see Farid make an appearance!
Farid makes an appearance and gets to play with Cindy again which invokes those old submissive lusts of hers. Kevin discovers this and after several hypno-fuck sessions manages to reprogram her.Cindy is then employed to use her sexual talents for information gathering and recruiting to protect and bolster the frat's "business".
ReplyDeleteChapter 19 was brutal, lol. Man did Kyra get it but good.
ReplyDeleteIs Kyra becoming damaged by the process and her us? First the spasms she had in the library and now all those thoughts of getting used and abused she was having even before her controlled gym session.
Bulgroz, I wonder, is the bleeding effect you mentioned before happening to Kyra in a big way? Is her controlled state becoming her awake state? What does this bode for her if that is what is happening? What does it bode for her and Jacksons relationship if he is becoming a total sub slut? What will Jackson do if this damage and bleeding is happening and he finds his GF and perhaps true love will end up someone else that he can't have because of what she becomes? Will it turn him against his frat brothers?
Many possiblities.
I think the organization is going to have to appear sooner than later. The frat boys are starting to make a mess that cannot be hidden so easily. How is the organization going to handle the frat boys? Killing so many people would bring unwanted attention. Does the conditioning work on men? It seems at the moment that it does not. Since the killer, I believe was a woman.
ReplyDeleteI am thinking that Daniel and Jen will eventually get back together. Just not sure how the ocnditioning will alter her. Will she be more submissive to Daniel and much more kinkier.
It would be a nasty turn of events if Radhu ended up joining the organization and his payment would be Serena as his personal slave and the return of Jen to Daniel. Let's face it, how many of us would take the high road when offered this kind of power and opportunity.
I am speculating that the organization is controlled by men who condition women to do their bidding. There are many women in position of authority so even if you cannot condition men, you could control a vast segment of society.
Daniel and Cindy will definitely have a sexual tryst or two before he and Jenn are reunited. It's a mixed blessing for Daniel as Jenn never loses her lust for strange cock. Farid owns Cindy and reclaims her as his personal toy to have her play with him and others at his leisure.
ReplyDeleteA twist of fate enables the remaining girls to escape their sexual bondage. They, together with their male partners, develop their own methods to defeat and ensnare their former masters for their bidding.
Just found this story, love it. Unforinately now I have to wait for postings now I'm caught up. Cindy holds the key to this all, just depends on how much the guilt she can carry and her affection to Dan will affect her, as it seems it's all abit of a game to her at the moment and as she is aware of whats happening to her, so she is not in the same boat as the others. Jenn will have a break down if MD anything to go by, Jackson will switch sides as he becomes aware whats happening to the girl he loves and hopefully it will all start to unravel. I don't know how Dan and co will take advantage of this as they really have no resources. Jenn's and serrina mind control is most probably the only downside as we knew it was going to happen early on in the tale and it was only a question of when. Dan and Jenn back together, don't know, who knows what perminate side effects will happen. Hopefully Biff will get a baseball bat. I gather the tale about half done and it's all set up for which ever way the author going to take us. looking forward
ReplyDeleteBulgroz: Please don't go for the "happily ever after" ending! I hope to see things progress to their natural conclusion. For instance, it has been implied that Jenn's conditioning is permanent and different from the others. In that case I don't see how her and Daniel could ever reconcile. It would be disappointing to find a conditioning "loophole" which allows them to continue their life together.
ReplyDeletei wonder how it will play out. it might not even fully end in book II. what will happen to cindy's plans...she does seem rather cunning.
ReplyDeleteJenn- I'm not so sure she'll be back to normal but: its been mentioned by Bernie- prior to he death that jenn "could" be put back to normal.
Not sure Farid will make an appearance. I think its just part of Cindy's backstory.
More interested in raven-haired woman and what role she plays with the company. can't wait to see her character develop more and interact with the frat and the good ole doctor.
Of course Farid reclaims Cindy while she is lusting for the Jenn obsessed Dan. Yes, Jenn returns but prefers strong cocks not weak Danny boys. Can't kill Biff as he is a wonderful villan. Thinking that the raven haired mystery woman is "the" expert in mind control technologies. Her actions will eventually ensnare the dastardly Dr/frat boys and free the enslaved Kyra,Serena and others.
ReplyDeletefor some specuation:
ReplyDeleteCindy finds out about Jenn being back but doesnt tell Daniel.
Think Biff needs a comeuppance: after all what he did to jenn is evil (he might like it)- but I'm a fan of Jenn not Biff.
Radhu finds out about the programmed girsl via his hack and about the videos and emails from Jenn/Biff.
Jenn stays loving the "pleasure" from ther activation, but is no longer activated, but is still messed up in the head from knowing what goes on. She wants revenge and contacts the company....
Perhaps Jenn is going to end up like the girls on smuttycaptions.tumblr.com ?
ReplyDeleteany thoughts on what know is going on?
ReplyDeleteStill think Farid is somehow involved in all this as he was the original
ReplyDelete"mind controller" of Cindy. Speaking of that beauty, I suspect she will have to use her lucious charms at least once or twice. Definitely to save Daniel from injury or capture and certainly to aid in their quest to thwart the evil fraternity. Perhaps agent Shawbank conducts a "personal interview" with the buxom Cindy or the sultry Jenn.
Always wondered what was that thing with Cindy's resistance to adjustment. Was this faulty programming on doctor's part? Or something else?
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ReplyDeleteI do not see the company killing Cindy. It would serve their purposes better if they kidnap her and try and figure out what makes her almost immune from their programing.
I am not sure how the company is going to handle the party. Killing a lot of people would bring untold amount of attention. I would speculate that they would be after the girls, Kevin, and anyone who had any idea how to program the girls. Can the company program men as well as women? That would be the easiest way to “wipe” out the problem. No man has been programed that we know about, so I am not sure if this is a possibility. I am sure Bernie told them everything there was to know about the above. Being a costume party, would make it easier to infiltrate the party.
So I think the company will take Kevin, Daniel, and Jackson along with Cindy to some location. Then we will learn more about this organization. They may take some of girls with them, Jenn Serena, and Kyra. I think Biff will try and prevent them from taking Jenn, so he will either be killed or severely beaten. This will lead to Jenn going crazy because she is not around Biff. I admit I am at lost as to how Daniel will deal with everything that seems to be getting ready to happen.
I have to say that I'm more than a bit disappointed in the racial dynamics around this story. In his commentary I find Bulgroz III to be an intelligent, thinking fellow. But he seems to have something against South Asian men, or at least against poor Radhu--who has been unmanned not only once (with the nasty wincers) but twice, struck down just as he finally reached his climax. Why do the Anglo characters get to have a good time, while Radhu's sexuality is repeatedly treated as a path toward death and castration? I had hoped for more from this author--a fully sketched Radhu would be allowed to be as fully involved in human emotion, lust and love as anyone else in this story. Instead, the author makes him an emotionless automaton, then kills him off...
ReplyDeleteBased on recent developments I try some WAGs on what might happen next and how book three starts off.
ReplyDeleteIt is probably wise to assume, that Daniel's college days are about to end. As I see it, the "company" will take down DIK and their little operation. Their agent removed the doctor and I firmly believe she killed Bernie as well. She also is keeping a close eye on all developments around the fraternity so it is not a giant leap to assume she will clear up loose ends soon.
My assumptions on the future are to some extent wishful thinking so bear with me. :)
DIK: I can see two major possibilities her. First, the company is taking them down permanently. Shouldn't be too difficult with access to ajustment technology. Deprogramm some girls, give them memories of being abducted and blackmailed for sex and together with what happened to Trish is should be an easy case.
Or second, they take down the unreliable persons, i.e. the Cuskers, install someone they can reason with as fraternity president and keep DIK running under company rule. Going with the dark tone of this story so far, that would be the most likely outcome. Jackson for president? :)
Jenn, Cindy: Both girls are somewhat unique in their adjustment. Cindy being able to resist and Jenn being active permanently without showing signs of shutting down mentaly like Marjorie. So I assume the company is highly interested in both. I guess both will end up under company control.
Serena: She is the most tough one to predict. She could end up on Daniel's side during the next book in search for Jenn and Cindy or somewhere else. I just hope she stays in the picture.
Daniel: His future is equally difficult to predict but I do have a favorite one. After the company takes Jenn and Cindy he could embark on another wild case for his girl or girls, just with more powerful foes, less clues and less persons to help him. Boring. :)
My prediction (wish) based on text evidence is that Daniel will, grudgingly of course, join the company. The company controls his access to Jenn, therefore has control over Daniel. His knowledge on mind control and his determination will make im an asset. On the other hand will he work in secrect to find a way to free Jenn and Cindy.
This would be in line with the Paul Ballard/Echo storyline from Dollhouse and the tv series had been mentioned before in book I so this might not be an completely unreasonable guess.
What do you think?
What was it Billy Shakespeare said about bit parts and players? Thirty chapters of "The Adjusters" has defined three prominent individuals with a varied and interesting mix of supporting characters.
ReplyDeleteMasochistic and overly moralistic Daniel and dangerously sexy, carpe diem Jenn have that mix of "Last of the Mohicans" and "Romeo and Juliet" thing going. He will find her whereever she is and their love endures despite all that has and will occur over the three books. Uncertain which of these two will slay the Biff the evil dragon, but my money is on the strong willed Jenn while her lover lies hurt, bleeding but alive.
Mensa candidate Cindy, everyones perfect GILF you want to hurt just a teeny, tiny bit, was a sexual submissive before University and desperately craves another master. No question this beauty will get what she keeps asking for but whom and for how long have yet to be determined. Will Daniel's Jennquest anger and frustrate him to the point that he temporarily abandons all thoughts and morals, embraces his darkside and selfishly uses Cindy both for carnal release and as sexual bait to others for their help? Thinking also a more permanent owner like Farouk could reappear and reclaim his property. Thinking and yes hoping, she gets used and abused several times and often before the end of book three.
Serena et al still have important roles in the remaing chapters but as in real life, all will gradually disappear dramatically, emotionally or without much ceremony from the lives of our beloved Jenn and Daniel.
I assume July 5 speculator meant Farid and not Farouk. Wouldn't that be an interesting reunion. Hoping one of these bad boys rides this beauty hard and puts her away wet (several times and often)! Unlike Jenn and other girls, no one has done that with this filly yet, and she is a natural submissive. Regarding the others, Serena and her classmate's significance will have to diminish with each book. Biff should be punished, but not before he has his way with a few more lovlies. Every good story needs a protagonist people. Jenn and Daniel reuniting is at best a 50-50 proposition in my opinion. Despite his recent somewhat heroic actions, Daniel has always been a bit wimpy and definitely displays cuckhold tendecies. Delectable and completely edible Jenn has been nibbling on that forbidden apple for some time with many different men. I am thinking she is not as entranced as she is transformed. Simply put, bad news for Daniel and the other men better keep taking their vitamins.
ReplyDeleteThe new guy (mutant) has a power way beyond anything seen so far with the ability to rewrite & control people instantly - with a weak point that he has to touch them first. Although he has only very recently acquired it and perhaps simultaneously a major bout of god delusion .
ReplyDeleteI now see a way forward for Jen to be reconstituted given the type of people Daniel will be hunting and the resources available in the company. Of course with some twists along the way. The danger(s) in working in such an organisation is that you are exposed to some weird shit with a very real danger of brain scrambling and physical danger along the way. Analysts like Daniel are typically kept out of harms way (mostly) while the wet operators do the dirty work. But then that would be boring for the story line. And Daniel being who he is will probably break the rules as soon as he gets a sniff of Jen's whereabouts. Interesting if Jen gets found by one of the people that the company is hunting or if Daniel uses one of them to get Jen back.
Given the ethics and morals of such company's (if they did exist) it would be unlikely that they would just eliminate the people they were hunting. They would have a lab (or 2) to examine, test, control and use the mind control techniques they find. And also to ensure the loyalty and obedience of their own operatives. Shades of Jason Bourne! Although Daniel's induction and training experiences so far seem to indicate that is not the case. Which says the company might actually be mostly good guys.
Given the type of work, the recruiting pool & the size of the organisation it would be hard to see how there wouldn't be some sort of government affiliation. The media shit storm that would have erupted after the frat party would have had all sorts of politicians, police, FBI, NSA, CIA and whoever scrambling for action. For the company to still be around and functioning means that they would have friends in very high places - or be some sort of Bavarian Illuminati secret organisation controlling the wheels of society behind the scenes. Which is not out of the question given the type of people they are hunting and the knowledge they must have accumulated along the way.
Easy to see how Bulgroz could expand the series after the 3 books into an X-Files type thing.
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ReplyDeleteCrosfyre makes some really good points. I think there are some great adventures for Daniel to participate in and we can exposed to many different mind control practices. It seems that Daniel's training was along the lines of a field investigator. He does not have the training to actually do any kind of "take down" of any real target. His mission would be to gather intel and feed it, back to HQ who would then send out the teams.
I just have this feeling that the relationship between Daniel and Shawbank will get close with some twists along the way. She may be the one who finds Jenn and brings her in. I also feel like she will be a major player in Daniel escaping the corporation with Jenn.
It will be interesting to see how much Daniel will change and what the actually changes are.
I have the joy/pain of recently finding this series, reading them all naerly back to back and then waiting for the next installment for another MONTH!!?! Ouch. Oh Well, Patience is a virtue.
ReplyDeleteI was speculating if the 30 (actually 31) girls from the frat house may have been "Rescued" for use by the Corporation. Of course that would not include Cin, Jenn, or maybe Kyra ( who was very "Damaged"). They were using tranq guns after all.
If so then maybe we will all enjoy the rebirth of Serena.
Just a hope, as she was very interesting. :)
techniquely it was 28 from the frat house then jenn persumed dead, Cindy persumed dead, and marjorie from book one being located. I would love to see Serena, Kyra, or Sonya turn up.
DeleteChiming in again after a few additional thoughts (post of Anonymous Sept 17th is mine), what would happen if Daniel (through a series of twists) got the power to control Shawbank? Perhaps he would go after "the ones" who caused all this to begin with? If he found out that Control was ultimately responsible for Jenn's being programmed (created the technology), would he take a clandestine course of revenge? Also, the email 'stories' of Jenn's may be a way for him to find her eventually.
ReplyDeleteI love the plot twists, I love the emotion (I cried as I read certain parts) but most of all, I love that the story isn't just about sex...It has a back story of what a person will do to get back the one they love.
ReplyDeletePersonally, I really hope all the girl end up being alive, I hope this company can get shut down, and most of all...Daniel, Jenn and cindy all live happily ever after!
I also agree with Mgregory,Jenn's stories are clearly a way of showing Daniel where she is.
I would love to See Daniel find Jenn
ReplyDeleteNow my plot point if the braclet is the anchor to thier programming then removing it should't the girl just return to normal. The exception being Serena, kyra, and Jenn. Serena and Kyra from bleeding or leaking as it was explain and Jenn because she permantly on.
I hope the DIK girls are used in the storyline more as Daniel goes farther into the Company. Maybe is albe to rescue his friends Serena and Kyra
I would love for daniel to meet Control whoever he/she is and in a plot twist is told about the girl for the DIK bash still being alive. Daniel decides to agrees to ascorp so he can help his freind Serena and Kyra and the others.
ReplyDeleteAlso while searching for a new freak they find video of Jenn alive which prompts Daniel to find her again.
WOuld like to see Cindy reenter daniels life in some way as a lover maybe even stay with him and Jenn like she says in # 28 aftermath, i believe.
i've read and re read all the chapters just for fun and here are my thoughts
ReplyDeleteI'd love for daniel to end up with both Jenn and Cindy. In #7 of book one Jen makes note of Cindys beauty and even suggest she join Daniel and her in bed. Cindy constantly tells Daniel she'd be willing to join him and jen. In #30 aftermath she even tell him she stay with him of go away his choice. So i guess i just like to see them all end up together. One big loving threesome.
I wouls love for Daniel to find Jenn again and hopely she won't be to screwed up and if she is they can fix her. Like to see Cindy join them. However, I can see so manydifferent directions for this to take. From the corporations hireing out "dates" to order, to permant slaves for people, the back sroey on jenn and what was done to her, who is this private detective I believe his name is Sam O'Neil and whats his story illuded to in The Aftermath. And thats just what hits me right now. I wish a had your writing ability so I could help you with this great story. All I can say is WOW!
ReplyDeleteI speculate that the DIK girls (Serena yay!) will be in a detention cell, being studied to reverse-engineer the process Dr Cargyle used on them, to potentially get ideas on improving their own mind-control process. Then, they get re-conditioned to be secretaries for AdCorp. Maybe… Serena as a secretary?
ReplyDeleteI also speculate that Sam will bring back the beaten-and-bloodied body of the guy Jenn was fucking for 2 weeks in Schenectady. Biff last said to Daniel, “Your little bitch? I sent her off to get some help. Friends of mine.” So, Sam would bring Friend 1 back to interrogate him on the whereabouts of Jenn and Friends 2+. Something to give both Daniel and Sam information, as well as a punching bag to work out their respective frustrations. I’m curious about Sam’s backstory, if it is similar to “they kidnapped my daughter and now she’s a broken shell of a sex-toy and now I’m seeking revenge”, or perhaps something more intricate.
This story lost me after seemingly following a 'monster-of-the-week' format with searching for Specials, but I believe it'll get better with emphasis on the search for Jenn and face time of the people we learned to care about in Books I and II, Serena especially.
Book II is the best work of MC I've read in a long time, and I trust Book III will get back on course. Keep up the good work, BIII!
It might be cool if Jenn turns out to be a female Special ... the first of her kind and potentially priceless to the Corporation. If she was born a low-grade special, it would fit with the way she wrapped Daniel around her little finger and how she walked right up to Jackson and made out with him. It also fits with the extreme effect she had on Biff -- everyone said his behavior changed for the worse after he met Jenn. The mind-control drugs may have strengthened her Special powers. It also fits with the ease with which she totally dominated Kyra (if her powers work on women too).
ReplyDeleteSpeaking of the dominatrix side of Jenn's personality ... maybe she comes back into the story in the company of Biff's brothers or best friends from "back home". She dominates them and is the leader of the pack in making decisions.
I wrote this in word and did not realize there is a cap on length so I will have to post it in three parts. This is 1 of three.
ReplyDeleteI don’t know if this is the proper place to post this but……
I am huge fan of all The Adjusters books. Bulgroz is a truly talented writer that is weaving an exceptional story line. Having read a lot of erotica (is that a good thing or a bad thing lol) too many stories are purely narrative, all action and provide little to no depth of the characters. It is incredibly refreshing to read such a superior work that allows one to get to know most of the characters so they relate to them on some level—like them, hate them, wonder about them etc.
Like all the readers and fans of the story I have done my own speculation.
The character(s) that I relate best to are Daniel and Jennifer. College I dated a guy and we became very close and were very open with each other. We felt we could share anything which is so unique. We would share embarrassing fantasies and made silly bets where one would be the other’s slave or have to do some task. A couple of times when I lost I had to go flirt with some other guy or groups of guys. It was fun and somewhat innocent and embarrassing as I felt like a total tease. When I read about the scene in chapter 7 The Third Card it brought all those memories back.
One thing I do remember when I was flirting and teasing with no intention of dating or seeing any of the guys and just playfully coming on to them was twice I was called a bitch in a rather mean or vindictive tone when I went back to my boyfriend who was watching. My memories and the story have me “speculating”.
There is not a lot on how Jennifer was trapped other than in Charlie and the Chancellor’s plot. Perhaps trapped is not the right word in my “speculation” and tricked would be a better word.
I also realized that other than Cindy having some memories of being at the DIK house and Jennifer reminiscing on the beach in Chapter 20 A Day In The Life (III) there is little on what the girls are thinking about what they are experiencing. Please this is not criticism in the least as I love the story and do not know what wonderful path it is leading down.
I enjoyed Kyra’s public humiliation at the gym in Chaper 19 A Day In The Live (II) walking with cum on her face and hair unknowingly. What I like about this is it showed a vindicative side to the DIKs or some of them to publicly embarrass or humiliate the girls publicly. This is different than how the girls are portrayed in the most of the story as though the public scenes, the NADA Bash and the strip clubs are pretty much a controlled setting where everyone is either in on it or expects to see something like that.
Am I babbling lol?
Anyways my speculation involves Jennifer and Biff obviously being upset at one getting turned down and two being publicly humiliated by getting slapped puts in place a plan that ultimately makes Jennifer a DIK girl. This may give him too much credit at being able to manipulate people and be devious but I speculate that he approaches the DIKs and makes a push to first get even with Jennifer then make her a full blown DIK girl. There is back and forth as she does not fit the profile of a DIK girl being attached to Daniel and Serena is her friend. During the debate Biff brings Jackson into it by reminding him she was just teasing and flashing her breasts and bra to embarrass and humiliate him with no intention of doing anything. He confirms what Biff says and mentions feeling embarrassed and being used for someone’s game. Everyone eventually agrees with Biff that Jennifer made the frat look weak and she needs to be taught a lesson. They go along also as they all want a shot at her once she is a DIK girl.
This is part 2 of 3 sorry for the lenght
ReplyDeleteDr. Cargyle and/or Bernie is at the meeting and Biff asks if it’s possible to get her just part way, to be pliable or react to suggestions just enough to mess with her mind some and put her in embarrassing or humiliating situations where her inhibitions are lowered she is torn and confused by the feelings of embarrassment and arousal. They say it should be possible with a small dose of an aphrodisiac and ecstasy and some other things they are working on.
To get Jennifer to start taking her “medicine” and embarrassed/humiliated they enlist the other DIK girls, Kyra, Cindy and a few others. They program them to be very friendly with her and also tell Cindy to make a play for Daniel. Jennifer is working out at the gym and is on the treadmill and working up a big sweat so Kyra gives her a bottle of water which she drinks fully. In the locker room some of the other girls are there talking about DIKs and how wonderful they are which Jennifer takes to mean dicks and begins to feel light head and aroused. She giggles to herself and goes to take a shower to clear her head but forgets to close her locker.
The shower does not help and she is feeling even more aroused and light headed. When she comes out her clothes have been switch. She is embarrassed at what is hanging in her locker and asks the girls if they saw anyone in her locker. They tell her no and they add they have been just talking DIKs the entire time. They go on about how strong, attractive and hot DIKs are and they just have to have them. Jennifer gets flustered at their talk and can’t leave in just a towel so she puts on what is in her locker. A pink tube top and short pleated school girls skirt and stripper heels. She is embarrassed and aroused and still light headed and the girls tell her she looks terrific and every dick she sees will want her. Jennifer walks back to the apartment getting more embarrassed with every step as her breasts are bouncing and everyone is looking at her which turns her on even more. Daniel is not home and she quickly hides the clothes and masturbates herself to sleep.
She is too embarrassed to tell Daniel or anyone else what happened and keeps it to herself but is confused at her embarrassment and arousal.
At one of her yoga classes the girls are there and they switch her water again and as they stretch and do yoga talk and giggle amongst themselves about DIKs. Jennifer gets aroused again and her lightheadedness returns. She joins in the discussion of dicks and how much she likes them. She is invited to go a hike with the girls in a couple of days.
Kyra again brings the water and they hike up to a lake. It’s a warm day and they start to perspire and as the perspiration rolls down her face and under her flannel shirt begins to get aroused. They stop at the Lake and sit around talking about DIKs and Jennifer gets flustered and is feeling frazzled at her arousal and lightheadedness. They decide to go skinny dipping and though Jennifer protests thinks the cool lake water will make her feel better. She strips naked like the others and they start to cavort around in the water playing and laughing.
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ReplyDeleteOne of the girls lets out a yell when she sees a group of DIKs on the shore by their clothes drinking beer. Jennifer ducks down into the water up to her chin not wanting to be seen naked by them but the other girls don’t seem to mind. They get out and run up the DIKs kissing and getting fondled.
Jennifer is humiliated at her situation and turned on seeing the guys groping the girls who are trying to get dressed laughing and talking about getting fucked and screwed later. The girls tell her to come on out of the water but she does not want to be seen naked by a group of guys especially DIKs. One of the guys tells her she can come out or lose her clothes for good. Everyone is laughing and teasing her making her feel even worse. One of them picks up her shirts and shorts and tosses them onto the fire they built she realizes she does not have any choice and slowly walks out of the lake covering herself with her arm and hand. She moves to get her bra and panties but one of the guys pick them up and throws them into the lake. She runs after them and puts them on. The wet material provides little comfort and is sheer given they are wet.
She looks for her hiking boots but they are gone. They stay and party for a bit with Jennifer drinking and getting felt up and caressed increasing her arousal. She feels the incredible need for dick and doesn’t know if she can wait until she Daniel. She is feeling all the emotions of embarrassment, humiliation, intense arousal and slightly tipsy. The guys take off leaving the girls behind to clean up the mess and put the fire out. They walk back to the car and Jennifer is on an emotional roller coaster feeling completely flustered and frazzled in only her bra and panties and barefoot and on the entire walk back the girls are talking about DIKs.
Daniel out away for the weekend and as soon as she gets into the apartment she masturbates three times and showers. The girls call and tell her they will pick her up in a hour and won’t take no as they know she is alone and they don’t want her sitting around moping by herself. She reluctantly agrees. She showers and gets dressed, jeans, blouse, and decides on a sexy pink bra and panty set and heels. As she gets dressed she begins to get aroused again.
The girls show and they go to a fraternity party not the DIKs but some of them are there. Jennifer is drinking the bottle of water Kyra gave her but when that is gone starts drinking beer. They are all flirting and getting felt up embarrassing Jennifer. They find themselves watching a beer pong game and Kyra calls winners with Jennifer as her partner. She refuses at first but the girls and the crowd talk her into it. Everyone watching wants it to be strip beer pong and the girls huddle and tell her she has to win otherwise it will be so humiliating with everyone seeing her stripping down naked at a party and if she strips down every dick there will want her and DIKs are wonderful.
Needless to say Jennifer loses and her humiliation is slow and painful the DIKs in the crowd make sure the crude comments are directed at Jennifer and people even manage to drench her in beer when she is too slow removing an article of clothing.
She is an emotional wreck on Sunday and is alone the entire time. She is trying to figure out what is happening to her and why she is acting so promiscuous and is so turned on by the embarrassment and humiliation.
That evening she gets a call from Jackson telling her he knows what is going on but can’t talk and to meet him at The Spirited Flesh. This would then pick up with what she told in Charlie and the Chancellor’s Plot.
I apologize for that but I guess what I am missing in the story is the emotional and psychological distress that Jennifer could feel. The emotional and psychological distress that Daniel is going through is wonderful. That distress is I think makes me relate to them.
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ReplyDeleteKathy, I enjoyed your version of how Jenn was taken. Mine is more basic and please remember I am not a writer. I think Biff leaned on Bernie to program Jenn without telling anyone. He probably got Serena or Trish to help lure Jenn into an isolated spot so they could drug her and take her to the basement.
It so simple and yet could fill so many holes. SHout out to BT3 maybe do a side story (third person) and tell about Jenns abduction and enslavement using Danny 123's idea.
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ReplyDeleteThank you, that is the beauty of imagination or is it fantasy. Though yours is more basic it also is plausible in the scope of the story. My version I think fits also as I imagine Biff wanting her to feel some comeuppance at publicly slapping him prior to taking her. The one thing I think we both agree is she is tricked into meeting Biff as why would she ever go given her opinion of him.
The story is rather wonderfully written, and I can broadly speculate on how the plot will be laid out in the 'Daniel chasing MCed Jenn' plot, using a few forshadowed "Chekhov's gun" plot points. On top of that, there's how how I'd want the story to end, as well.
ReplyDeleteThe first major point is that they genuinely love one another - a subject that is quite often dealt with in erotic fiction, but mostly avoided like the plague in MC stories because fucking with true love is something that even makes non-consensual cuckold porn writers a feel like assholes.
Not that it doesn't happen, it just that love never gets mentioned. Not many stories have a plot that goes " 'but if I serve you forever there will be a huge hole in the middle of my heart that will forever be empty!' 'Good.' he said. She smiled hornily, with an internal scream that lasted 50 years."
But their love was raised idly in the very first chapter, and reinforced by Jenn saying it again to Daniel /after/ she was conditioned at the start of book 2. Obviously, this gun went off when Biff ordered her to mutilate Daniel at the end of the book, and it was simply too abhorrent for her to contemplate, but that gun's got a few more bullets in it. We now know what Biff's final instructions for her were, regarding Daniel - avoid him at all costs, and literally claw his eyes out if she sees him. The denouement(i.e. the big ending) of this plot arc simply has to be that daniel finds her again; Perhaps Jenn will run away when she realises he is close, but that would be a rather cheap extension to arc of the plot, particularly as the climax(literarily, i.e. the big decision the protagonist has to make) was the Destruction of DIK, and Daniel joining evilcorp. Also, This means that storywise, Daniel has to, at some point, catch Jennie - having the protagonist chase someone for 3+ books and not catch them is just straight-up bad storytelling - and maiming him is something that "Jennie" simply cannot do.
The second, huge gun is that permanently activated programs make the subject's personality burn out. We know this happened to Marjorie in a far shorter time than Jenn has already been programmed for. Jennie and Jennifer are going to kill each other, leaving her a catatonic meat-puppet that can be programmed, but cannot be repaired. If something doesn't get done about this in short order, Daniel's going to find Jenn a brainwiped fuck machine at best (although Marjorie being this responsive was stated as being abnormal), a comatose vegetable, or simply dead. And that is going to happen REALLY SOON.
ReplyDeleteAt the current point in the story, Jennie has been institutionalised and is being used by the ridiculously corrupt at-some-point-everyones-gonna-go-to-fuck-me-in-the-ass-prison-for-this staff (that's what'd happen in RL, maybe not tomorrow, or even soon, but as Ben Franklin said, "Three can keep a secret, if two of them are dead." and how I'd actually like it to play out - even if it was only a casual mention in a news report later.) Jenn is actually getting some me-time away from the induced Jennie, and that's probably deliberate, to delay the fact that JENN IS ABOUT TO DIE. We know from the first short story that Jenn actually knows that,
And we know from the Charlie story that she's going to escape, probably with the help of the emapthically-nice-guy Sanderson.
This should put her back on the P.I.'s radar, allowing the daniel/jenn meeting.
I expect that jenn will make it to cleveland, as there's been no hints of severe Ohio-related trauma to make her lock up and disobey. I would expect that there will even be a fair amount of dirty plot there, but I expect that inevitably Jenn will be found.
What happens after that? well that depends on Daniel's ADCorp arc. We know they're going to "impliment standard agent protocol" with him - and that's surely some
ReplyDeletesort of mental conditioning - but that someone at the top has taken a special interest in him. So I expect some twists there, and we now know there's
a special serum they brew from the Specials, which some people are resistant to, or even immune - will they make a serum from Cindy to help Jenn break out past Jennie, or even convince Shawbank to give blood to make Jenn immune? Or will Daniel have to become a ninja, stealing flasks of serum from evilcorp's high security labs? He's certainly going to be stealing blood and meat from Specials they catch in the field.
And then there's the actual plot, regarding The Adjusters and ADCorp. They've abducted a lot of DIK girls, including Serena, Kyra etc. unfortunately for them, they are already dead, so they're not getting out of evilcorp intact. If they're lucky, they'll get reconditioned into new identities and released, once the doctor's research has been reconstructed. In their cases, that's possibly a blessing in disguise, as the author has killed off their partners, and smashed Kyra's sanity to pieces.
Unless Bulgroz's storytelling skills fail him, at some point we'll get a natural ending - although probably just Jenn gets some or all of her will back, and the adjusters plans get somewhat changed. The hardest ending to try to pull of is a satisfying Bad End - there's a reason hollywood is afraid of them; if you get it wrong, it's far worse than failing to finish the story.
Looking at past work, bulgroz prefers to go with the bittersweet in the fashion of Phillip K. Dick, whose stories end with a new norm being established after the conflicts of the plot, rather than everything being magically fixed. And if that's not clear, I mean that as praise.
so I predict: Jenn escapes to cleveland and is eventually located, but left there until they can fix her. Daniel and Cathy work on a "cure" which is somewhat effective, but Jenn bears difficult scars from the experience. Meanwhile, we find out what ADCorp /really/ want, although they might be using questionable means to serve a greater good.
tl;dr : My mental magic 8-ball says "Outlook good" for bittersweet happy ending, but not "Yes definitely"
As to what I want? I /want/ Jenn to be fixed and none-the-worse for the experience, and for them to live happily ever after. Her story is a little too extreme for me, and her POV stuff makes me a little sad.
it will be more whise to kill Biff and then let jenn in a catatonic state where she was like unsure of if his master will awake again, then being discovered by his cousin the president of DIK and bring back jenn to the frat to have something to negociate with malcom
DeleteI suspect that rumors of Bif's demise may have been greatly exaggerated. Geek that I am, there was a time (when I was too young to legally be here) when I might not expect a last gasp attack by a presumed dead villain. But, it's been overdone by action and slasher movies.
ReplyDeleteAfter the DIK house was immolated, it felt like the end of the last Game of Thrones season. (You killed Serena & Radhu & Kyra you bastard!).
ReplyDeleteyes i wanted to maybe have a betrayal by randu to have her girl only to him and then betrayal DIK for his friend
DeleteI hope that Cindy and Eve turn out to be not absolutely immune to specials. They should be more like Marvel Comic heroes, unlike DC comics (with a shortage of Kryptonite).
ReplyDeleteThis is getting very interesting plot wise. Based on B's themes, I wouldn't be surprised if it turns out the PI is in fact one of the adjusters pulling strings. Maybe even some plot where Cindy is "captured" by someone else.
ReplyDeleteI really hope in the end, we get a hot spicy scene involving Jenn + Cindy.
The PI has an ax to grind. His wife/other-female-relative has been taken by The Adjusters and he is out to rescue/avenge her. He is getting information from someone within ADCorp and passing the items that further his interests on to Daniel.
ReplyDeleteLook up the definition of intermezzo. This purpose of this part of the story is to entertain us while we wait for the next act to begin.
i was hoping that maybe you have another idea following the same story but with out biff and jenn because well they left and they never come back, and allowing malcom to take lets call it good and bad decitions like confront the boys of DYK and then being convinced to join them and perfection the brainwashing process with the help of Rad
ReplyDeletei dont know maybe it works, i like it a lot this story but i was thinking in maybe make like another time line where malcom joins DYK and succums to his lust
i was thinking on another point of view of the story like for example randu finding that the agent shawn is not an fbi agent
ReplyDeletedaniel being betrayed by his friend randu and serena leaving him alone with cindy
jackson following cindy and triggering serena to make her wear her dik girl bracelet, and then triggering bouth girls, that will allow us to see the real mean of the anchor on action
maybe also making a deal with the frat to make biff pay for his actions like "the enemy of my enemy" on a confrontation and then a trap where officer gonzalez is being triggered by the president of DIK and told her to arrest Biff and then malcom taking off biff's DIK ring and then allowing him to go to jail
while randu and the doctor work on the lab where randu works on how to unprogram jenn who is on a break mind proccess for the lost of biff and his gang brothers now in jail by being found guilty of slavery, kidnaping and rape of jenn
and like a twist for the finale maybe allowing malcom and randu being consume by the power and knowledge and join the frat with his now DIK rings and their now devoted girlfriends